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The line read:
"Fallow your heart",
I wondered what more there was to say.

Fallow your heart, leave it
empty and waiting for a season
so love can grow, nourished,
in a replenished, whole ground.
Fallow your heart so it does not become
Worn and barren with overuse.

The line read "fallow your heart",
but the poem, overworked,
meant only "follow".

Please remember that spelling counts.
true story.
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Daily Deviation

Given 2012-05-26
Spelling Counts by ~FRBRkitty ( Suggested by riparii and Featured by BeccaJS )
:iconshadowedacolyte:
ShadowedAcolyte Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
This is a quite smart little punpoem. Congrats on the DD.
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:iconxlntwtch:
xlntwtch Featured By Owner May 27, 2012   Writer
:+fav: I'm glad you could do something with such a spelling. You did a fine job and wrapped it in truth. Thank you.
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:iconmissnoko:
MissNoko Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
It was deep until the realization that it was a misspelling. :'D
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:iconacrowscollection:
ACrowsCollection Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist Artisan Crafter
haha, this is brilliant! =)
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:iconfrbrkitty:
FRBRkitty Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
Thank you! :)
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:iconmonopolycat:
Monopolycat Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
It's just beautiful. Great piece of poetry.
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:iconfrbrkitty:
FRBRkitty Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
Thanks
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:iconquiestinliteris:
QuiEstInLiteris Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Dear God, yes.
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:iconfrbrkitty:
FRBRkitty Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
:)
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:iconichigonyaa:
ichigonyaa Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
Brilliant!
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:icondreamingorawake:
DreamingOrAwake Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist Photographer
Love this :)
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:iconelphieofkiamoko:
elphieofkiamoko Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing. Gorgeous and funny? Yes.
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:icontexasdreamer01:
TexasDreamer01 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
A good lesson in a humorous format. :love:
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:iconladyofgaerdon:
LadyofGaerdon Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
Ooh this is lovely. I love the wordplay and the subtle message. Congrats on the DD!
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:iconangelride:
AngelRide Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Student Writer
This is...absolutely breathtaking. The idea of "fallowing" your heart is so beautiful.
I love the story behind it, too. It is humorous, but in a somewhat melancholy, wistful way. Congratulations on the DD. :heart:
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Braxton-T-Rutledge Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
The six lines in the middle are a solid core, the idea of letting the heart lie fallow as if it were a field is a wonderful play on words\metaphor. With it you can truly explore the inner workings of the voice, examine what reason the voice might feel it necessary to lay out a season.

While the misspelling might be amusing, the six lines between the start and the punchline are serious. The idea is serious, and it is one that distracts, or totally derails, from the humor. By the time I arrived at the bottom, I am disappointed to find the punch line is there at all, and perhaps that let down is intentional, the reader being torn away from a beautiful thought to find a coarse punch line, but when the idea has the potential to be much more than a joke, it seems unfortunate to be used as such.

Perhaps, if you revisited this in the future, you might consider letting the Cleverness lie fallow, and take a look at the heart and its needs.
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:iconkaiyagold:
KaiyaGold Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
I LOVE this...!
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:icondisrhythmic:
disrhythmic Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
Beautiful. <3

Oh, the joys of unintentional wisdom. :P
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:iconsavage-night:
Savage-Night Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
Very lovely, made me smile.
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:iconabbieoctopus:
abbieoctopus Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
I think I like 'fallow your heart' better. But this is great!
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:iconvaliantshadow:
ValiantShadow Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Student General Artist
Interesting; one misspelled letter made a great difference in the meaning of the poem.
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:iconraabit:
Raabit Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
Great concept and excellent execution!
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:iconsteelwinged:
steelwinged Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
Nice. I found this interesting. :) Though I had to look up the word fallow first to really understand it. XD
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:iconavallynh:
Avallynh Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
this was a delight to read.
congratulations on the DD, it was exceptionally well-deserved. :heart:
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:iconmisslunarose:
MissLunaRose Featured By Owner May 26, 2012   General Artist
"Fallow your heart."

You found an interesting (albeit unintended) piece of wisdom in that poem. Thank you for sharing it with us so beautifully. :love:
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TransientTopHat Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Student Writer
Clever concept, and your execution is strong; your enjambment is especially skillful. If I had to give one critique, though, it would be on the last stanza. Stanza three packs a real punch, but I feel that stanza four is just a reiteration of the title. Ending on "follow" would feel stronger, I think. But overall, this piece is solid!
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:iconlyingdyingwonderbody:
lyingdyingwonderbody Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
I would second that about ending on "follow" and leaving the last line out.
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:iconwingdiamond:
WingDiamond Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
:iconwizardplz::iconsaysplz: Yesh, Spell-ink Kountz!
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:icondoodelay:
Doodelay Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Student Writer
Excellent, i went to look what "fallow" meant and it really made me appreciate this :]

maybe leave the definition in your description for people?

good poem ^^
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:iconfaungrae:
FaunGrae Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is quite a funny little writing here. Clever and creative. Many congratulations on your DD, you deserve it!

(And even more funny is that some people in the comments seemed to genuinely think that "fallow" was actually spelled wrong. XD )
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:iconaxisenigma:
AxisEnigma Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
Ih totrly agwee!
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:iconriparii:
riparii Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
ah, I'm happy. :D
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:iconwolfgrrl92:
wolfgrrl92 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
truly magnificent. :worship:
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:iconkymira12:
Kymira12 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Personally I would rather 'Fallow your heart'. It just seems more realistic and beautiful. It's good to see a cliched line twisted like you did and make sense as well. I hadn't thought of it the way you put it before so it's very thought provoking as well.

You did a great job with this so congratulations on your Daily Deviation!
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:iconcatluvr2:
catluvr2 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is cool. Congrats on the DD! :+favlove:
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:iconcatsurin:
Catsurin Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Student Traditional Artist
I understand completely. x
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:iconsevslover6195:
Sevslover6195 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
This is brilliant! No wonder why it got a DD Congrats!
I try to make sure my spelling is correct but it doesn't always go so well.....
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:iconjustisover:
JustIsOver Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
Great stuff, amazing how much depth can come from a simple spelling mistake :)
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:iconicemoon-wraith:
IceMoon-Wraith Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Student Writer
I've read this about five or six times in succession so far.
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:iconfrbrkitty:
FRBRkitty Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
I'm glad you liked it. :)
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:iconicemoon-wraith:
IceMoon-Wraith Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Student Writer
Oh, wow. I adore this.
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:iconpurple-panda-sxr:
Purple-Panda-SxR Featured By Owner May 26, 2012   Writer
A sad truth.
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:iconwade-comics:
Wade-Comics Featured By Owner May 26, 2012   General Artist
A great play on a popular phrase, this is great work, very clever and thought provoking
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:icontanya3286:
tanya3286 Featured By Owner May 26, 2012  Professional Writer
its humourous.. but so true in a life like way! Its neat to get something real to grow out of just plain bad spelling, and this is great! <3
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:iconimportantnobody:
ImportantNobody Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
This is brilliant! You've written it beautifully :)

Congatulations on the Daily Deviation. You definitely deserve it.
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:iconfrbrkitty:
FRBRkitty Featured By Owner May 31, 2012
thank you!
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:iconerilypse:
erilypse Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
Haha, thanks for this :)
Congrats on the DD.
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:iconambsi:
Ambsi Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
The idea of fallowing your heart is actually quite beautiful ^^
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:iconarchelyxs:
archelyxs Featured By Owner May 26, 2012
This is delightful. Congrats on the DD! :heart:
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:iconfrbrkitty:
FRBRkitty Featured By Owner May 29, 2012
thank you!
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