literature

Parted heart

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Take me from the world tonight
hold me in your guarded heart
make me forget the world tonight
I can't bear to be apart.
My mind is spinning and I can't fight
the words that cloud my heart
only your warm arms can fight
the words wanting to pull us apart.
When we're alone I know we're right
you breathe the beat of my heart
the way you hold me says I'm right
that we'll never truly be apart.
Ever want to just curl up and let someone's homeness wash over you and find your center again?.... and then go and write a dorky poem instead. XD yeah. hopefully it's not to horribly bad. cheers, y'all.
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ShadowedAcolyte's avatar
I like your endword repetition here. It allows you to evoke the cuteness of rhyme without a lot of the singsongy clicheness of perfect rhyming poetry. Still, the images you use are mostly cliche. I really challenge you to express yourself more uniquely; that will make your poems supermemorable and stuff. *grin*