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Matchbook Poetry

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Matchbook poetry-
pre-rain jitters
and stippled walls-
gently jetting ideas
into empty space…
We should start again,
but your beat's put me off my rhythm.
...no one should let me scribble in coffee shops. I write this. ;)
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ShadowedAcolyte's avatar
Well, I'd drop the "..." and remove the embarrassing apostrophe from "beats," but I think this is a gem worth saving and improving upon.

Its images are novel and they work together in an interesting if hard-to-explain way.

I say it's a keeper, maybe due for some revision.